I went to an open house at Gotham Writer’s Workshop last night (they were serving cider and cupcakes) . I have been considering taking a writing class for some time now, and a free 1 hour class seemed a good way to put my toe in the water. I signed up for Beginners Fiction, which is, you know, fiction for beginners. Our teacher had us introduce ourselves and reveal our guilty pleasure. Of course- one woman said her guilty pleasure was that she read all the Jane Austen novels. Can you imagine somewhat that would admit to something so guilty? I mean really- what other skeletons could be hiding in her closet……
For the second part of the class, we were given 15 minutes to write a story using our guilty pleasure. Since I didn’t get to read my story out loud- I am presenting you with my story. Remember- it’s first draft and unedited and I know there are some plot issues…..but any other critique is welcome and encouraged. Don’t worry- we return to regularly scheduled programming tomorrow.
Maeve and Sheila sit in Maeve’s upscale living room, wine glasses in hand. They are here to discuss Sheila’s apparent lack of love life.
“You are so being Catfished?” Maeve says.
“What is with you and that show? I am not being catfished.” Sheila replies.
“Have you ever actually seen this guy?”
“No. He has a busy job.”
“Please. All jobs are busy. It’s why people get hired. There’s work that needs to be done- hence, they create a job.”
“No. Seriously. He’s a Doctor.”
“I’m calling Max- he’s tough. He’ll agree with me. This guy is not a Doctor. I thought you said he works in a shelter. And knits blankets for orphans.”
“Now you’re being ridiculous. He’s a Doctor. A busy Doctor. The last time we were supposed to meet he got called on an emergency.”
“Why doesn’t he schedule a meeting when he’s not on call?”
“Well….”
“Well what? My husband is a busy doctor. But he’s not always on call. He has a life.”
“I know you have the perfect life. Handsome Doctor husband. Perfect child. Perfect apartment. Perfect job. You don’t know what it’s like being single.”
“Well, you’re only going to know being single. You realize this gorgeous doctor you met on Tinder, but never actually met is not real. Can’t be real.”
“You have a gorgeous Doctor who’s real. Why can’t mine be real?”
“Because you’ve been sexting for 4 months and only seen pictures of his better half. How many face shots have you seen?”
“Well. one or two sort of blurry pics. We start texting, and things get all hot.”
“How come no FaceTime?”
“He usually texts from the hospital.”
“Ok. Isn’t that cat fishy? Why only from the hospital? He’s hiding something.”
“Don’t sabotage my relationship.”
“It’s not a relationship. You have fictional sex 5 days a week. You never even talk to him on the phone.”
“Well, he’s….”
“Busy. I know. But don’t you think he’s hiding something?”
“Like what?”
“Like what? He’s married. Or he’s 18. Or he’s in prison. Or he’s a she.”
“No. I can tell he’s a man and he has maturity. The beauty of his language. He gets me. No prisoner or child would get me like that.”
“It smells….fishy to me…”
“Stop. I’m tired of being alone.”
“But you’re still alone. I bet if you text him he won’t answer. Try it.”
Sheila takes our her phone and sends a text. At the same time an iPhone buzzes in the apartment. Maeve’s husband enters the living room, picks up his phone, grimaces and shuts off his phone. He kisses the top of his wife’s head and walks away.
Ok- it was really hard not to self edit as I was typing it in! I have more plot issues than I thought…but there you go!
And this ad addition that I forgot the first time around! My guilty pleasure is the tv show Catfish!!
It is good, we all start somewhere so don’t be too self critical.
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You are Welcome. βΊ
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I have Never done a creative writing course. My writing comes from other writers as inspiration. A bit from this book, a bit from that book, a little from another. I just use my own words and build. Though Adnama & Alex is a mixture of my Imagination & life around me.
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I thought the mini class last night was fun. I’m going to sign up for one
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I hope it helps. πβΊI’m sure it will.
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This is compelling! I want to read more.
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Thanks! It was fun writing this!
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Oh dear, will the friendship survive?
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I know!!
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I’m intrigued by the story line, but quite honestly I’m more intrigued by what your ‘guilty pleasure’ is that you were asked to use for this writing exercise… ???? π
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OMG I can’t believe I forgot that! My guilty pleasure is the tv show Catfish!! Gee….I wonder what everyone thinks my guilty pleasure is!!!
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Thats ok, I always tell people mine is Downton Abbey πππ Shhhh!
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Your secret is safe with me. In the vault.
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Hahaha! Glad you cleared that up π
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That is such great news…this sounds exciting!! Jane Austin guilty pleasure hmmmm hahahaha
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I know! And thanks!
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I figured out that it was Catfish. π Great story, I want to hear more!
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Thanks! And thank gosh you knew it was Catfish….I mean….I did open up lots of possibilities for guilty pleasures….
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Hopefully no one thought your guilty pleasure was sexting 5 nights a week.
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Well yeah….I only sext 3 nights a week and I’m not guilty about it…π
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I don’t watch Catfish much just because I don’t think about recording it. But whenever I happen to run across it I can’t look away. I’m always telling my grandma not to get catfished with her Words with Friends “friends”.
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It’s like a train wreck! I love it!!
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I should set it to record. I am addicted to The Challenge. So, I’m not above watching MTV.
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Oooh….never watched that!
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This exchange:
βHave you ever actually seen this guy?β
βNo. He has a busy job.β
βPlease. All jobs are busy. Itβs why people get hired. Thereβs work that needs to be done- hence, they create a job.β
Speaks volumes about Maeve…and hints at…when one gets serious about their writing they stop sharing and start looking for renumeration for all the work. Take the class and have some fun.
Regards,
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Thanks for feedback. I’m working on a novel. I don’t share that. But fun writing, like this class, where I can experiment and play I may share
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You’ve got something here! Juicy!
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Thanks! Trying to have fun!
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That cliffhanger though!
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I thought it was fun!
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Ruh roh! I really enjoyed it. I want to read more too!
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Thanks! It was fun!
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I really like it! I can imagine the two friends looking at each other in total disbelief. I think taking a writer’s course is a great idea, I want to try one, online though.
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Gotham, the place I’m taking has online courses! But you should find one!
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hahaha it’s embarrassing that being an Austen fan is embarrassing π hehe I loved how you used the prompt π
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The teacher said to the girl “really? Jane Austen is a guilty pleasure?”
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hahaha I know that’s crazy- I wonder what on earth made her feel guilty about it?!
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She said cause it was romantic……
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hehe aww I feel bad for her, cos there’s *nothing* wrong with romantic book!!
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Love it! I knew about mid-way it was her hubby. I think when the friend said, “you have a hubby who’s a doctor” that’s when I thought ruh-roh!
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That was freakinβ awesome! I never saw it coming! More, more, more…..
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Nice job, have fun with the class. I went to a poetry workshop once. I went with this awesome poem that I had written. I was feeling pretty excited until I got back my edited version. They tore me up. But after the shock wore off and I took in the critique I did learn a lot. So keep an open mind to learning new stuff.
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Haha! A brill twist at the end. Keep going…I like it π
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Thank you!
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OOOh Errr, I want to read the next bit. π
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I liked the twist at the end!
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It’s funny, but when I started writing, I didn’t know that was going to be how I ended it…it’s funny what happens when you just start writing!
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I think sometimes the characters actually take control and direct their own stories!
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That’s what happened! As why was writing, it seemed like that was what they should do!
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Wait… what?! That was hilarious at the end I didn’t expect that at all.
Nice, really good story. Short and to the point and I was hooked so you were doing great.
That ending and the kiss… π Oi vei!
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Thanks!
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You kept me on my toes with the fast-paced, familiar dialogue in that sort of interchange. The end, although somwhat predictable, it was completely unexpected. I sound contradictory, but I promise you it made sense in my head. Haha! I loved it as it makes me think that there’s much, much more you can develop from this quickie.
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Thanks! It was a fun assignment!!
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